Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which why children are less well educated today. To what extend do you agree with this statement.

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It is true that

teenagers

are becoming

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more time in front of

digital

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entertainment industry.

However

books

are not a tool that

can

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with. In my opinion,

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partly agree with

this

statement because children can be benefitted from

education programmes. On the one hand, young people use textbooks example doing homework and

leaning

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new

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, and took a huge number of knowledge from it ,and

also

after they read many

books

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child

children

read

books

quickly, sometimes if

teenagers

recite some contents of

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novel,they could write those on their essay,so

kids

will get a lot of reading or writing skill and knowledge from

books

,which is much better than

which is

digital

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the digital

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entertainment industry,

kids

use it to watching

series, variety shows,talk shows e.g. for

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of hours

everyday

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On the other hand

although

television does relax the

kids

, television still

have

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a lot of

education

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film and programmes, if

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bureau

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more educational children’s films or channel ,

then

teenagers

could leaning study, study, cooking skills.watch educational

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channel

channels

will lead

kids

learn

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more life skills that

books

can not tell younger.

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,a channel

tell

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if a kid living

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underground

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floor and did not bring the key with him,

then

he can climb through the window, to back home,

this

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personal approach to life. In conclusion,

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think

books

could help children get knowledge , but television is not only

relaxing

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electronic product

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also

can let

teenagers

know how to

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realistic

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issues in their life.

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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which why children are less well educated today. To what extend do you agree with this statement.

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In many countries, some people earn very high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country. Others believe that the government should not allow people to earn salaries above a certain level. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers ,should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, people have developed poor eating habits and do not eat balanced diet. What are the reasons behind this? Suggest possible solutions to control this.

The charls below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.