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Many people say we should invest more in space industry while others say we should spend that money on other purposes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Alongside the rapid development of science and technology, the
space
 industry,
in particular
, has been booming in recent decades. Considering the potential of
such
 an industry, many
people
 believe it should be invested more while others believe we had better spend that money on better purposes.
This
 essay will set out some key points before any
further
 conclusion. On the one hand, it is undeniable to say that there are severe issues which should be solved as soon as possible to save a huge number of ordinary
people
 in the world
such
 as famine, natural disasters, economic recession, diseases, terrorism, etc., and other essential factors including health care, transportation and, importantly, education.
Such
 a practical humanitarian emergency requires considerable financial sources to maintain the stability and sustainability of humankind on Earth.
Hence
, it is undoubtedly not hollow words for many
people
 to say vast investments for research in the universe is far too high compared to the visible benefits it brings.
On the other hand
, the huge amount of money allocated to
space
 exploration, contrary to many
people
’s opinion, does bring practical advantages. GPS and satellites must be mentioned as typical achievements. Thanks to the application of GPS, delivery services and drivers are now faster and more punctual since the suppliers can have the precise location of their customers. About satellites, scientists and professionals are able to observe and predict many potential occurrences of disasters and
such
 forecasts can save a huge number of
people
 each year. These indirect applications of
space
 achievements have been working well. In conclusion,
space
 programmes knowingly require giant financial allocation but it is not true that the benefits we gain from it are not worth it. In my opinion, it is absolutely wise of us to continue funding those researches which can assist humans to take control of
this
 universe on higher levels.
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