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The government should allocate more funds to the educational sector than health sector. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, developed
countries
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 realize how important education is for increasing their national economy. Well educated citizens have positive impacts on societies, they tend to have innovative ideas, follow the rules, well behaved, and well mannered. Developed
countries
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 usually have ten times the budget compared to developing
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.
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, developing
countries
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 with limited budgets are struggling to allocate their funds either for the educational
sector
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 or the
health
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sector
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. Developed
countries
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 like America, Japan, the United Kingdom, and some European
countries
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 are focusing their funds on the educational
sector
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. For them, high-level education can help the nation to grow rapidly.
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, Japan Government spent nearly 30% of their national budget on education and research. Most of the citizen's educational levels are on Bachelor's degrees in engineering, laws, and science that greatly improve their manufacturing industry.
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, Japan's economy is one of the highest in Asia.
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, developing
countries
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 have to manage their limited budgets. The educational
sector
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 is important, but the
health
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sector
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 is more important for them. Because a sick person can not go to school to study like a healthy student.
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 is a dilemma to prioritize which
sector
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 is getting more funds than the others.
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, the Venezuelan state spent only the fractions of 10% of their national budgets on the educational
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, and 20% on the
Health
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sector
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.
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 is reasonable because the country facing a serious disease problem. They have to build Hospitals and public
health
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 centres to overcome the pandemic. To conclude,
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 the educational
sector
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 is very important and
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 require funding,
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, more money should be apportioned to the
health
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 care system.

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