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The relatively recent development of games on phones, computers, and TV consoles is extremely popular with people all over the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such electronic games?

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Nowadays, game apps on phones,
computers
 and television
are highly demand
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 by
people
 all over the world. The main benefits of
this
 are developing
technology
skills
 and
involved
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being involved
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 with new codes of
technology
.
However
, the drawbacks are
lack
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a lack
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 of social
skills
 and isolation. Instilling the benefit of developing
technology
skills
 is an upper hand for anyone
becuase
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because
 it is common to
work
, study and
work
 by using a computer.
Besides
,
people
 are used to
get
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 to
play
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playing
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 and
work
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working
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 with
keybording
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keyboarding
 and electronic devices that
this
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apply
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will help them to
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adapt
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adopt
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adapt
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 to
this
 new era of IT jobs.
Furthermore
, being
involve
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 with
technology
such
games
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as games
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 on phones and computer helps you to create
skills
 that society
were
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was
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 not
accustom
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 to
use
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. Nowadays, it is easier to see many children playing with
computers
 and cellphones and for
them
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 it is not scary anymore to
work
 at school with laptops.
For instance
. in 2019, when the world-pandemic issue started all children were sent to study at home by working with the computer which was easy for them to adopt because they
were accustom
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 to
play
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playing
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 with
games
 on the
computers
. One of the disadvantages of playing electronic devices is
lack
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a lack
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 of social
skills
becuase
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because
 the majority of citizens do not know how to start a face to face conversation. Speaking is a very
frustating
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frustrating
 situation for some
people
 because they do not know how to start a conversation with
other human being
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another human being
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. On top of
this
, some of them choose to sent text messages to communicate
eventhough
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even though
 they are in the same house.
Moreover
, it is frequently seen isolation among these
people
 who spend many hours playing videos
games
. They avoid
to get
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getting
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 in contact with others and live a very lonely
live
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 because they have no time for
firends
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friends
.
For example
, in
USA
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the USA
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 most
of
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young
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the young
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adult
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adults
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 do not like to hang out with others because they
prefer
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 chat
each
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with each
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 other even if they are in the same room.
As a result
, they do not know how to ask questions or talk to each other and
this
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thus
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create
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 a conflict personality disorder. To
conlcude
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conclude
, playing
games
 on
phone
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the phone
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,
computers
 or television is a great way to spend time by yourself or your loved ones because you can enjoy
this
 activity anywhere;
however
, spending many hours
by
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playing
games
 every day might create a personality and social disfunction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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