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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions.

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It is observed by many companies that their newly joined
employees
 are lack with their interpersonal
skills
such
 as cooperative
skills
. I believe that
,
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this
 happens due to
lack
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a lack
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 of self-confidence and work experience with the relevant field and
this
 can be improved by scheduling training
sessions
 on a regular basis by the management. Many
employees
 apply for
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a job
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job
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jobs
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 from different fields and places. It is not necessarily possible that everyone
have
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 the same grasping power.
Also
, many
employees
 are college pass outs so they might have not any field experience or relevant experience which can cause
to
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them to
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 adopt things slowly.
For example
, in college people are taught more theoretical
knowledge
 than practical
knowledge
 so when the students
graduated
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 and join any organisation to start their career they find things differently from what they taught in colleges and
this
 can cause less cooperation in the fieldwork. Above mentioned issues can be resolved by scheduling timely training
sessions
 for those
employees
 who are new in marketing and for those who are from different fields. Training
sessions
 can help new
employees
 to understand
that
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how the company works and they can be familiar with new technologies as well which are new to them.
Moreover
,
employees
 shouldn't be hired only based on their academic
skills
 but practical
skills
 should
also
priotirise
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prioritise
 as well because academic
knowledge
 can help to achieve
them
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their
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 certificates but practical
knowledge
 will make any person more mature and focused in any particular field. To sum up, lack of practical
knowledge
 can be the actual cause of less cooperation in the working profession.
However
, it can be learnt and improved by training
sessions
 and
personal
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a personal
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self learning
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self-learning
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 attitude.
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