Question: Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

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Over the

last

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few decades, crimes committed by youngsters

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rising

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rapidly in cities around the world.

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essay will discuss the reasons for

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and provide some possible solutions.

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with, it is very important that

children

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should be raised in a balanced way. He or she should be nurtured well by his or her

parents

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, these days, it is often seen that

parents

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are neglecting their

children

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is maybe because of the fact that both mother and father in cities now have to work and often not around the

children

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, an excessive amount of violence is translated from the newspapers,

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channels, movies and social media platforms.

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, there is a movie recently released named "PUSHPA". In

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movie, the smuggler is portrayed as a hero and

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has a negative effect on

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. Many individuals may

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influenced by

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movie and

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apply

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commit crimes.

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, there are ways to tackle

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problem.

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parents

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should keep an eye on

children

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's activities and they should spend time with their

children

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Parents

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should take

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responsibility for their

children

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's actions and they too should be punished if their

children

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commit crimes.

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, the government should bring strict laws to punish criminals and courts should not be lenient because they are young. The government

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should bring stricter rules about content in the mass media with respect to violence, crime and romantic scenes. In conclusion,

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the levels of youth crime increasing,

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issue can be mitigated by the efforts of both

parents

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and the government.

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task response

Develop more clarity and depth of analysis in discussing the reasons for increasing youth crime. Provide clear and specific examples to support your points.

coherence cohesion

Work on organizing your ideas more cohesively, ensure a clear development of your argument throughout the essay. Consider using more transition words and phrases to improve coherence.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

262 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

surge
productive activities
quality education
social media
peer pressure
economic disparity
disadvantaged backgrounds
legitimate means
inclusive education
mentorship
community policing
youth engagement
early intervention
constructive pathways
social services
at-risk families
root causes

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Question: Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

young adults, compared with the of older people. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distance. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand and what measure could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.