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Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #pace #stress #life #effect #families
Nowadays, living in
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 city makes
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connection
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 in
family
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 getting worse caused by
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 and high-speed of modern life. I strongly agree with
this
 opinion because
community
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 less spend their time with family and they
also
 did not want to share their problem
to
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 their closest family.
First
 of all, contemporary lifestyle
demand
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 people to the fast pace for their activity and cause negative things in the house. They usually spend most of their time
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activity
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activities
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 outside
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home
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 like working and studying. That activity caused them got less contact with their family.
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,
community
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 spend about 8 to 10 hour
to work
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 and takes around 2
hour
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in
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they
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 way to the office.
Thus
,
high-speed
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 lifestyle
lead
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 to
bad
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a bad
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impact
for
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family
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a family
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 in
urban
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 city.
Secondly
, stress caused by work
preasure
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pressure
also
have
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 drawback
impact
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household
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the household
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. Nowadays, people keep their
problem
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 away from their closest
relative
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relatives
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. It will cause
connection
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 between them far away than before and bring negative
impact
.
For Instance
, a father got fired in his works, he will keep secret his problem to their family and it could lead to
bad
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impact
for
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 the families. That's why
,
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stress
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 in contemporary life could make
negative
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a negative
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impact
for
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 families. In conclusion, I completely agree with the
statment
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statement
 that
current
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 lifestyle could bring
negative
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the negative
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thing
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 to
family
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the family
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.
This
 is because high-speed of living that makes people got far away from their family and stress that they got from
work life
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 lead to community become more selfish than before.
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