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With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating to regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is ban it completely. To what extent do you agree?

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Fast
food
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 plays a vital role in the modern world. In recent years, fast
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 has been
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spread
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 to several countries and has become pretty popular around the world especially in Asia. The sorts of fast
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 include french fries, fried chicken, hamburgers and corn chips. Obviously, it is wonderful for
people
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 to eat fast
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 though the drawback is fast
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 may cause
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 issues. Fast
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 is delicious and convenient to obtain
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 cardiovascular problems may affect the human body if an individual eats too much.
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, the more fast
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people
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 have, the more
health
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 concerns they will acquire. The process of fast
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 is through highly thermal
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 which makes
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 become crispy and cooked.
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, there will be a great deal of
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 in fried
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 when frying. The great amount of
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 in fried
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 may cause hypertension and diabetes after
people
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 eat fried
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. In order to avoid too much
oil
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 which can impact
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, those who eat a great amount of
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food
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 need to exercise more regularly than normal
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.
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, the major solution is to not eat too much fast
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 and have more vegetables for the purpose of a healthy life. In that way,
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 are able to not only avoid diseases but
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 maintain good body shape. In conclusion, fast
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 is
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 a common type of
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 in daily life.
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, eating too much fast
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 may cause cardiovascular problems involving hypertension and diabetes. If
people
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 have less fast
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 and exercise more regularly, they can avoid
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 issues and lead a healthy life.
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