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Many people argue that humanity must radically alter its ways of living in order to prevent more climate change. To what extent do you agree?

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The issue of
climate
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change
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 is getting more notable and urgent in many places around the world. For recent years, human beings have been seeking types of recycling
energy
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 including solar
power
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, wind
power
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, even
power
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 extracted from corn. These types of recycling
energy
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 can not only generate as equal electricity as traditional
power
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 like coal but can
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 be more friendly to our environment. Apparently, it is vital for humanity to alter ways of living in order to prevent
climate
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change
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.
Climate
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change
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 is harmful to mother
earth
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 and causes terrible disasters to humans. The heat of the
earth
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 keeps climbing up, which will raise the level of the sea and overwhelm some countries.
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 a hot temperature will
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 result in forest fires making a lot of species abandon their habitat. Human’s houses may be intruded
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 wild animals because these wild animals without homes have to search for a temporary shelter. The problem of hot temperature results from using coal to generate electricity and
deforestate
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deforestation
deforested
 too many trees.
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, humans have a responsibility to prevent
climate
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change
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 for
the
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life on the
earth
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. Many people argue that the more recycling
energy
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 we utilize, the lower the temperature of the
earth
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 will obtain.
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 it is hard for a few nations to convert coal
power
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 to solar
power
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 or wind
power
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 now because of the development of the economy. If we are willing to use recycling
power
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 rather than disposable
energy
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,
climate
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change
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 will be gradually resolved.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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