Some believe that younger family members should be legally responsible for supporting older family members when they become physically, mentally and financially unable to look after themselves. Do you agree or disagree?

Some citizens believed that young family members must
be legally pressure
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to take
care
of their
eldery
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elderly
people
if they get sick, dependent or unable to take
care
for
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themselves.
This
essay agrees with
this
statement because taking
care
of our
parents
and family member is a moral action that needs to be done and it is the right thing to do.
To begin
with, young adults have a moral debt
with
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their
parents
who support them in so many ways when they were children.
Parents
had the social and moral obligations to not abandon their family because it is totally unacceptable.
Besides
, it is the time for young generations to give back to their
parents
and family all the love and protection that has been given.
For instance
, in the USA there are multiple entities that entitle
parents
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many obligations
such
as
phychological
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psychological
, and
moral
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behave
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while they have their children with them or they might
lost
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their parent's
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parent's
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custody. As result, as well as them these laws asked
parents
to protect their children, so young adults must have the same obligation to love their
parents
and extended families.
Second
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reason, supporting our family members
it
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is the right thing to do because that gives them the opportunity to be a better
person
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people
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. It feels good to give them all the support and protection because
this
offers a way to evolve as
a human beings
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.
Moreover
, most
of
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people
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get sick because they have no mental balance, so they ignore what
it
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is the right thing to do.
For instance
, Fullerton University
,
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presented statistics
which
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comfirm
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confirm
that
people
who are generous and take
care
of their loved ones have more balance and mental health in
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their
there
the
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lives
life
lifes
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. On top of
this
, younger
people
who give support to their older family members
helps
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to form better future generations because
people
learn from actions. To conclude, young relatives should be legally obligated to take
care
of their loved ones because it helps to create a healthy balance in
people
's souls and
also
younger generations will set a great example to those who followed them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • filial piety
  • elder care
  • aging population
  • public resources
  • state welfare
  • financial burden
  • legal mandate
  • family dynamics
  • moral responsibility
  • residency
  • integrity
  • dependency
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