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Many people argue than in order to improve educational quality, high school students should encouraged to question and offer criticisms on their teachers. Other think this will lead to a loss of respect and discipline in clasroom. discuss both views and give your own opinon.

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It is believed by some people that high school
students
 toneed stimulate to question and offer criticisms on their educators for to improve the educational system. Nowadays, it is important that it is the most effective tool to develop educational quality for
students
 and
teachers
.
However
, I am of the opinion that
this
 is a matter to be debated in the light of some factors before any conclusion can be drawn.
First
 of all, due to the popularity of the private education sector and online education resources, these days,
students
 can compete with some of their
teachers
. And meanwhile, they are as versatile as expected,
for example
 with the rapid development of science and technology,
students
 as a new invention in the 21 st century is becoming very populous in social life.
Secondly
, critical suggestions by
students
 may motivate
teachers
 to improve their teaching methods.
Furthermore
, these critical suggestions encourage
teachers
 that,
this
 influence positive effects in the educational lessons, for , instance the reason why the teacher can enlarge their knowledge of scope.
However
, the disadvantages of
students
' criticisms are undeniable.
Firstly
, a student at high school is not natural enough to criticize educators since their negative feedback are based on emotion and feelings rather than facts and logical conclusions. Above all
teachers
 can be scared of the criticizing and start to ever mark and look up at
students
.
Moreover
,
students
 will become good-for-nothing people without
teachers
. To sum up, I find the
students
 offer positive results to influence for teacher`s skills and educational quality. I am in favour of pupils' offers to their
teachers
.
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