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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, advances in
technology
/technological advancements have allowed governments and the police to keep the public under constant surveillance.
However
, sometimes
this
 is done without the person’s consent. The
use
 of security cameras and other
technology
 to monitor is certainly advantageous, but there can
also
 be some drawbacks and concerns derived from
this
 development
which
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 we should not overlook.
Certainly
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 there are benefits. In areas where there is a high crime rate, the
use
 of surveillance equipment may act as a deterrent to criminals. If they can see the camera, they may think twice about breaking into a building or stealing a car. When a crime is carried out, the footage from the security camera can provide evidence or lead to the police who can
also
 trace the suspects or criminals with cellphone tracking
technology
 to locate them and bring them to justice.
On the other hand
, there are a number of concerns. In countries where human rights are ignored, the
use
 of security cameras or listening devices may be harmful to society. People should be able to hold meetings and express their own opinions without their privacy being invaded. There is
also
 a very different issue we should consider. Nowadays, many people upload personal information and photographs onto social networking sites. They often do not realize how easy it is for other people to view
this
 information or for the site owners to
use
 the data or photographs for their own financial gain. It seems inevitable that there will be more and more ways to monitor society in the future.
However
, it is our responsibility to evaluate new
technology
 and decide whether it will do more harm than good. Surely our freedom is more valuable than technological progress.
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