Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

In
this
modern and digital era, we are more associated
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and mostly
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mobile devices like
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phones
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,
tablet
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tablets
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and
laptop
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. Using these devices brings
lot
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of
opportunity
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to advertise. These advertisements
comes
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with their
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positive
and negative points, I will discuss my views on the good and bad effects of ads.
Firstly
, let us discuss that viewing
lot
of promotions about the
products
that
reallu
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really
are not
impotant
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important
. We
stuck
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in the web of
materilised
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materialised
marketing. Due to appealing offers and attractive
so called
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"
benefits
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" people often buy
lot
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of needless
products
. Buying these
unnecessery
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unnecessary
goods increases
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financial
finacial
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the finacial
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burden on the
personals
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.
Further
to
this
, it is
also
waste
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a waste
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of money, time and resources that ultimately impacts our environment.
For example
, the mobile phone with
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. It is marketed in the name of
technology
however
it was completely
impracticle
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impractical
and useless. On the other side, some
products
are
life
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a life
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changer
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. Considering,
lot
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a lot
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of marketing and media agencies are using Artificial
Intelligance
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Intelligence
based
technology
to place promotions and ads. While using
internet
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the internet
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, people came to know
the
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that
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technology
and product make their life so easy and comfortable.
For example
, seeing an ad for
electric
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an electric
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chair
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chairs
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for disabled/
handicap
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person
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persons
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with improved
fuctionality
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functionality
might help
lot
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of
specially abled
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persons. Another example would be a cooker cum fryer for kitchen, it can solve and address many travellers problems.
Here by
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I have discussed my opinions based upon my experience and knowledge. I would say using AI and
technology
ads can make
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impact on a life of humans. On
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other
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side
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if promotions and
products
are not properly placed and evaluated before marketing it makes
loss
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the loss
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of people's money and time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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