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Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to make people recycle more is to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste?

#people #waste #homes #requirement #laws
One of the major
problem
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 we face is
waste
management
. The number of people
hold
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 firmly to believe that
waste
 from their accommodation is not recycled at noticeable amount,
thus
goverment
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government
 should emphasise on making some policies. I believe, the proper
waste
management
 from home to factory should be planned and legal
interfereance
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interference
 is needed to make
this
 process more smooth and strict.
Initially
, it is
duty
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 of
home-owners
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homeowners
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 to separate
waste
in to
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into
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category
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categories
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 through which
material
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materials
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such
 as glass bottles can be stored in
separate
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a separate
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trashcan
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trashcans
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. After which it is
duty
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the duty
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 of
waste
management
 company to transport
this
waste
diffrent
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different
 compartment or if possible they can
allote
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allocate
allot
 dedicated vehicle just for
this
 purpose. To ensure
this
 work
occured
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occurred
smothly
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smoothly
, some
upper level
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management
 hold
needed
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is needed
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. To do that cameras and GPS can be installed on trucks.
Secondly
, the
goverment
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government
movement
 can
arrage
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arrange
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a program
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program
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programs
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 to create awareness of
recycle
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recycling
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 material
benifits
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benefits
. The detrimental effects of
imporper
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improper
waste
management
 of plastic bottles are already in effect in some areas of
world
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the world
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 but the rules made by
government
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the government
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 to have effective rules will ease some amount of result.
moreover
, the programs to
incorage
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encourage
nantionalist
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nationalist
 to recycle products which can create the earth better place for
next
genrations
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generations
generation
. In conclusion, the effect on
envirement
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environment
beacuse
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because
 of huge
waste
 is already in effect. I believe with
support
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the support
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 of country leaders we can
achive
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achieve
 a target to recycle the product by which we can reduce some amount of
waste
.
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