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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large company can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that
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the
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society can never be able to keep their places of stay clean except if the state gets involved and some other big companies.I completely agree with the statement.
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 of all, in order for a city to be developed
money
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 needs to be involved, so
people
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 alone can not grow anything without
money
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. For
intance
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instance
 , a
community
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 in a rural area , in Africa can try to build a borehole or connect electricity on their own but they will fail because all that needs finances,it needs the state and rich
people
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 that will remove
money
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.
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 , saying that
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society alone can not do without the government.
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, Rich
people
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as well as
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, as well as polititians,
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polititians
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politicians
 play an important role in a
community
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,
people
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 tend to listen more to
people
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 with
money
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 than those without
money
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.The
community
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 will be knowing that if they listen to the rich
people
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 it means they will be paid abundantly after the
work
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moreover
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 it is easy to
work
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 together with a push of
money
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.
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, In Africa, generally, there are schools that still has no roof, the
community
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 has tried to
work
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 together and they have failed but the state can always put a word and the
work
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 would be done in a minute,
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 all that comes into my complete agreement of politicians behind
improvement
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 of the environment To sum up, it is crystal clear that no one can improve or update anything without the politicians and those that have stable finances, wherefore l completely agree with the statement.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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