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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large company can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#individuals #environment #governments #company #difference
It is argued that
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the
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society can never be able to keep their places of stay clean except if the state gets involved and some other big companies.I completely agree with the statement.
First
 of all, in order for a city to be developed
money
 needs to be involved, so
people
 alone can not grow anything without
money
. For
intance
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instance
 , a
community
 in a rural area , in Africa can try to build a borehole or connect electricity on their own but they will fail because all that needs finances,it needs the state and rich
people
 that will remove
money
.
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 , saying that
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society alone can not do without the government.
Secondly
, Rich
people
as well as
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, as well as polititians,
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polititians
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politicians
 play an important role in a
community
,
people
 tend to listen more to
people
 with
money
 than those without
money
.The
community
 will be knowing that if they listen to the rich
people
 it means they will be paid abundantly after the
work
,
moreover
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 it is easy to
work
 together with a push of
money
.
For example
, In Africa, generally, there are schools that still has no roof, the
community
 has tried to
work
 together and they have failed but the state can always put a word and the
work
 would be done in a minute,
therefore
 all that comes into my complete agreement of politicians behind
improvement
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 of the environment To sum up, it is crystal clear that no one can improve or update anything without the politicians and those that have stable finances, wherefore l completely agree with the statement.
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