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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly,others value quality of work above appearance.Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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A few companies consider that wearing good attire by their personnel is beneficial to the association whereas some others focus on professionalism rather than dressing. Both views are considerable and in my opinion, the prime focus of a good firm should be on the quality of the work not on staff's attire even though a general guideline should be provided to all about dressings. On one side, entrepreneurs believe that the dressing of their staff affects the success of their business. If the appearance of workers is in executive style, it will impress and provide a positive feel to their trade partners.
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, a manager of a multi-national firm visits premises for trade talks where he can meet the people in good attires, surely, it generates positive feelings about the organization which ultimately help to succeed in the field. On the other side, many modern organisations don't believe in any restrictions on dressings and they concentrate on the productivity and professionalism of the workforce.
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 companies expect good business if their cadre works more professionally and effectively.
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, if a manufacturing firm can meet all deliveries in due time, it can build a high reputation in the market and thereby more profits in the future. In my opinion, in today's competitive market, companies should more concentrate on the quality of their work ,not on staff's dressing and having a vision and a goal to achieve is a way to succeed in business. But it is better to provide a general guideline about a worker's appearance to maintain professionalism.
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