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Animal testing has always been controversial issue. Some people believe that governments should ban these practices completely. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Animal testing is always has been a
critisised
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criticised
 topic around the world. Many people can not believe how innocent animals can be tortured by huge pharmaceutical and
cosmetical
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 companies in front of the whole eyes world. And for
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 reason, they consider that governments should ban
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 practices, which in
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 case I partially agree with the statement. To start with the argument in favour, animal testing should
stopped
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 and new animal protection laws
sould
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should
could
 be installed. Nowadays,
animal
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 situation has improved and as it knows, in some countries animals has a lot of rights and are protected by the governments.
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, in Spain animal
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possession
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 animal passport and if some illegalities are applied
againts
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against
 animal rights, there is a possibility to be judged. Regarding
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testing animal practices, are considered cruel and out of period, cause
animal
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animals
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 as
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human beings, have feelings and must
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be protected and respected.
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, we have to admit that thanks to animal testing
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 positive research have achieved successful results. And thanks to that, many
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pharmacies
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 and vaccines
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 been developed with
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 objective to keep
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humanity
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health
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 and safe
of
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pandemies
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pandemics
pandemic
.
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 a good example of tuberculosis, malaria and other lethal
deseases
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diseases
 that put
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humanity
in
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risk of existence. In conclusion, from my perspective, animals should be protected cause
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 practice is not completely moral. But, I can not deny the benefits that
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 procedure
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 brought to
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humanity with the aim objective to save our lives.
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