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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

No doubt that thinking about the past takes a vast amount of time in everyone's life.
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, we should decide whether we let the past affect our decisions and life in the present, or we may
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 live our lives freely without the chains of the past.
This
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 essay argues that learning about the past is a valuable thing to do and will provide some pieces of evidence and examples for that position.
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Learning about the past of other
people
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 is relatively important as we can learn from their mistakes and their correct decisions.
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, when choosing a career path or any other big life-changing decision, we can really make use of other
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's experiences and see the possible ramifications if we
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 a similar route. Of course, not everyone is the same
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however
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; however
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learning
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, learning
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 from other
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's experiences can have a positive impact on our future.
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 can benefit from his own experiences in the past. As the famous quote
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says,
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 "we live and learn", the reality proves
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 quote as a fact. Some
people
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 will argue that older
people
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 are usually wiser and can have
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good judgment and vision for the future. Another evidence for
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 argument is that scientific research
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 that a tremendous part of anyone's personality and character is shaped in
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 childhood.
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, learning about our own past and taking lessons from it is a great attitude to have and a skill to master. In summary, the past has a great impact on our present lives
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 I personally highly disagree with that original prompt that argues that it does not have value for us living in the present.

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Your view is clear. Keep a direct line of thought from start to end.
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Add more facts or examples to back each idea. This will make your point stronger.
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Some sentences have small errors. Check grammar, like when to use capital letters after first word and make tense stay the same.
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Link ideas with clear joins. Words like 'also', 'but', 'so', 'therefore' help the flow.
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Use simple and exact words. Some words are big; try small, common words:
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Clear position on the topic.
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Good structure with intro, body, and conclusion.
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Some linking words to show order and reasons.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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