in many countries children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government has the responsibility to solve this. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, obesity and
unhealthiness
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of
children
is
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one of the controversial topics that are
discussing
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often. Most of the dwellers believe that
,
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governments should take responsibility for
this
.
However
, I totally disagree with
this
statement and I am going to describe some points in my essay.
First
of all,
children
are closer to their
parents
they spend most of their time with family members
,
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so that
parents
have to control their diet and daily consumption of
foods
. Because of
this
, elders can provide them with
more
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healthier food rather than junk
foods
.
For example
, every day we can see television and Instagram advertisements which are showing unhealthy
foods
. After seeing
these kind
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of videos,
children
are interested in consuming these types of
foods
and ask their
parents
about
it
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them
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.
Nevertheless
,
parents
should explain the harm of these sustenances and direct them proper diet habits from
the
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childhood.
In addition
, the
child
have
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to do more physical activities
such
as running, swimming or walking that help to digest easily and
also
each country has parks and tracks for
children
.
Moreover
, these activities can help the blood circulation and mental health of the
child
, since parts of
body
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will work physically and actively.
Furthermore
, if
parents
can control
child
's daily physical exercises, it will be beneficial for their health forever. In conclusion, by given
points
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the points
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above, we can realize that
,
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the main responsibility of
child
health depends on the direction of
parents
but except
from
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government's
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the government's
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relativity.
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