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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of University education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #aim #university #education #graduates #jobs #individuals #society
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education
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 is key to success and it not only provides
knowledge
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 but
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 thaught value of life. nowadays,
education
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 is considered as key to jobs,
whille
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while
 others perspective is it promote
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better community.so we can discuss
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both value of
knowledge
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 in
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 essay. once
knowledge
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 can be
recogonised
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recognised
recognized
 through their achievement in their
education
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 and it helps to get
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 career in their life.
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 , a person who
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 to become
doctor
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 has to obtain
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 degree to meet
requirements
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 for a professional doctor. so they can have
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 profession and decent salary for
living
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.
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 is the basic
conditon
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condition
 to get a sufficient position in the job world.
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,
Education
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 has to teach moral values and social benefits for him and a country. social skills are necessary to drive
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 nations economy and well being of people.
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institutions
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 to teach team leading , social wellbeing and communicative skills.
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example
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 many
top notch
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 companies employees have friendly environmental workplaces and inside sports to relax, babysitter areas working parents.
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increase
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 workforce power and
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healthy
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 environment around their labours. In conclusion, based on both the point of view,
education
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 should teach both social value and
knowledge
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 to become professionals and build betterment of their life
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