IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7.5

Water is a natural source that should always be free. Government should ban the sale of bottled water. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#water #source #government #ban #sale
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
It is considered that being a gifted resource from nature
water
 should be available at no cost so few claim that authorities should prohibit the sale of bottles that carries
water
. Even I ponder the same. The predominant reason for
this
 is
plastic
 is non-biodegradable material that causes litter and waste to nature
consequently
 degradation in the environment.
Therefore
,It destroys the natural environment and causes more species to be extinct . Along with
this
, it causes health issues .As
plastic
 comes in contact with the sun rays releases residues that are harmful to mankind. Chemicals Released from
plastic
 cause chronic diseases
such
 as cancer.
Besides
this
 , not everyone can afford the cost of bottled
water
 as it is difficult for the poor sections of society to purchase bottled
water
. On the flip ,side an array of society believes that there will be adverse effects on the states‘ economy as a
plastic
 industry will lose upon restriction of selling the bottled
water
,
for instance
 ,factories that make
this
 kind of
water
 provide a wide range of job opportunities ,
thus
 it helps a lot of employees to finance their expenses. If the government banned bottled
water
, a lot of factories would shut down and a considerable number of workers would lose their jobs. The rate of unemployment would increase. Not only
this
 but
also
 It would be difficult to carry
water
 during the travelling time.
Thus
 , a ban on bottled
water
 will bring inconvenience to people . To conclude,
although
 it is claimed by many that putting restrictions on bottled
water
 will affect the economic health of humans is more instrumental ,
Therefore
, authorities should forbid the sale of bottled drinks.
Submitted by ritu1508.dcsa on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: