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Children today spend more time watching television rather than they did in the past. Describe some of the Advantages and Disadvantages of Television for the children

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Nowadays, most
children
 are more interested in spending
time
 on
TV
 than in the past. There could be several reasons for
this
 occurrence,
such
 as
advance
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advances
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 in
technology
.
This
 essay wants to discuss the pros and cons of
this
 event.
Firstly
, in an age where
technology
 is advancing day by day, the generation of
children
 has
also
 undergone changes due to these changes. One of the benefits of
this
 occurrence is that
children
 are taught through video and
this
 may help them learn better. Especially
the
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 corona era,
training
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system
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systems
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 use
this
 method a lot. Given that in the past,
children
 spent most of their
time
 playing, but today due to the lifestyle changes and apartment living, television can be
a
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great entertainment to fill
children
's leisure
time
.
Secondly
, watching
TV
 maybe make kids lazy than ever. Because they do not have enough physical activity. In the
past
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 the
children
 preferred to
playing
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play
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 but now the kids
does
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do
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 not have that energy. So, they choose the easiest way and watch television. Another disadvantage that can be
mention
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this
 puts the health of
children
's eyes at risk. Most
children
 with
this
 condition have weak eyes. The advancement of
technology
 has caused some games like PS4, XBOX ,… to be connected to the
TV
 which causes more
children
 to
spent
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spend
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 more
time
 in front of the
TV
. Overall, advancing
of
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technology
it
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can be both good and bad. On one
hand
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 the
children
are learn
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learn
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 better through video and
this
 may help them.
On the other
hand
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 watching
TV
 maybe make kids lazy and it may cause them to have weak eyes.
This
 makes them spend their
time
in addition
 to watching movies and playing on
TV
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational programs
  • diverse cultures
  • entertainment options
  • language skills
  • critical thinking
  • social awareness
  • shared experience
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • inappropriate content
  • academic performance
  • attention problems
  • social skills
  • commercial influence
  • addiction
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