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In most parts of the world, people are living longer. What is the possible cause of this situation? Is this a negative or positive development?

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In
this
 burgeoning world,
people
 are living longer as compared to the past, in most regions of the globe. In
this
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biggest
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 reason for
this
 is health awareness among individuals and explain
it's
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its
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benefit
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benefits
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 and
drawback
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.
To begin
with
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 the cause of increased age is the healthy lifestyle which is being followed by the majority of
people
. They prefer to eat fresh and healthy meals followed by
a
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regular exercise ,meditation, yoga etc. to stay fit.
This
 will result
into
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increased
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 immunity
level
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 and
hence
 keep them away from
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 and other communicable diseases.
For example
, during
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a covid
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 pandemic,
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 of infected
people
 is high for those who have obesity, lung and other health problems as compared to the others.
Therefore
, staying fit is a way to
stress free
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 and long life.
Decreased
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at
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old age has a negative impact . Because elders need more time, money and medicines for their care,
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of
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that younger ones have a barrier in their career growth due to them.Sometimes they have to reject their growth options which
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avaialble
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available
 overseas.
On the other hand
, healthy
people
 keep on working till the end of their life which is helping in the development of a region. Elders are
also
 spending more time
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 the community after their retirement. In nutshell,
People
 are living long by following a good diet and physical workout.
Increased
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The increased
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 population of the old aged
people
 have a negative impact because of their care but has more benefits to the society.
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