Some people believe that if a police officer carries guns , it can encourage a higher level of violence. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are a lot of
police
officers
carry
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guns
in different situations because their duty is
protect
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to protect
protecting
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to
public
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the public
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from
attacks
but there are some individuals who give opinions that if any
police
officer carries
guns
. Due to
this
, it can encourage
to
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apply
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violence
on
highly
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level.
However
, I do disagree with the statement because they want to protect people from
rubbers
as well as
terrorists
. To start with,
the
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number of
argument
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arguments
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have been put forward in favour of
encourage
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encouraging
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a higher level of
violence
if
police
officels
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officers
officials
carry weapons.
Firstly
, there are some situations when they can encourage
to
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others
such
as protests and some areas where mostly
rubbers
or
terrorists
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terrorist
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moments are
happen
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happening
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. With
this
,
terrorists
can attack
on
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apply
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them and it can become
serious
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a serious
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situation for
police
.
For example
, there are lots of terrorist
attacks
happen
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happening
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in
the
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apply
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Jammu and Kashmir is a region of India where
mostly
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most
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police
officers
carry
guns
due to
this
,
violence
also
reach
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reaches
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on high level.
On the other hand
, my opinion is
opposite
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the opposite
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of
this
statement.
First
,
police
officers
carry
guns
for
protecting
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protection
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to
public
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the public
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from
rubbers
as well as
terrorists
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terrorist
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attacks
. They play
very
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a very
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important role in these situations . By means of
this
, people feel
save
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safe
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.
Secondly
,
violence
as well as crime
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, as well as crime,
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can
also
reduce in
the
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apply
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society if
police
officels
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officers
officials
carry
guns
. With
this
, they can shut
to
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off
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rubbers
and
terrorists
.
This
thing put
good
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a good
the good
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effect on society. Owing to
this
, thieves feel fear and do not
crime
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crimes
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again
on
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others. To conclude, I think
police
officers
need to carry
guns
for protecting
to
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apply
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people in
rubbers
and
terrorists
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terrorist
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attacks
. They can reduce
violence
and crime in
the
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apply
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society with the help of
guns
.
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