In many parts of the world, people search for family history. some people think that finding for the previous generations is a thing to do, but others think that it is better to be focus on present and future generations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It has been witnessed that studying genealogy has become a controversial topic for the
last
decade.
Thus
, a section of
community
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reckons that fathoming
history
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the history
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of
family
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the family
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has turned out to be beneficial,
however
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another group of individuals deem that searching out about ancestors is
sheerly
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a sheerly
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worthless activity. In
one
view, it has medical advantages for a family,
nevertheless
, another viewpoint suggests that our upcoming events and happenings have
tremendous
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influence on a millennial’s character, which is
more
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superior in my perspective. On the
one
hand, indubitably, knowing about
one
's forefathers,
their
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past life is extremely significant from
medical
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a medical
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perspective. Since a few families have some hereditary
disease
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diseases
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such
as Thalassemia, diabetes and hypertension that run down from generation to generation, in order to avoid any
further
complication of affected genes, people are involving themselves in
study
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the study
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of genes.
Apart from
this
,
one
can know the glorious past of their ancestors and their contribution towards society.
Hence
, they can better understand their origin, moral and ethical values and carry their legacy forward.
On the other hand
, myriad reasons make a section of people stress
present
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and future. First and foremost
is that
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our present defines our
further
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future
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life. If people have
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right approach filled with daring thoughts, optimism and zeal for
further
growth, indubitably the
overall
development of an inhabitant
as well as
society is inevitable.
Thus
, looking at the past lineage would have too little impact on our today. An example of
this
could be,
according to
forbes
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, it is revealed that a majority of renowned entrepreneurs concur that the parameter of
past
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in shaping our upcoming life is not accurate rather
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today's course of action should be a benchmark for tomorrow.
To conclude
,
although
knowing about the previous generation is
the
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way of keeping on our family's values and
it
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apply
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acts as a curative measure, the paramount significance of staying in
present
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the present
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and future for
holistic
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the holistic
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progress of
community
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the community
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must be acknowledged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ancestry
  • genealogy
  • heritage
  • lineage
  • descendants
  • forebears
  • progenitors
  • legacy
  • identity
  • cultural background
  • inspiration
  • life lessons
  • practical
  • beneficial
  • unpleasant truths
  • familial conflicts
  • moderate approach
  • prioritizing
  • delving into
  • addressing current needs
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