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Best way to reduce the number of crime among young generation is to teach parents good parenting skills at what extent do you agree disagree give your personal example.

#crime #generation #parents #skills
Thesedays
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These days
,
number
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the number
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 of
crime
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crimes
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commit
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 by the young generation is increasing. A section of society
belived
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believed
believes
believe
 that it can
be minimise
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be minimised
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 by educating
parents
 good parenting skills.
To begin
 with,
parents
 play
vital
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 role in
upbringing
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the upbringing
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 of their
child
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children
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. To make it simple, children are attached to their
parents
 and
hence
parents
 should know how to raise their
child
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children
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. To quote an instance, unless
parents
 are lazy and unaware,
rate
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the rate
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 of
crime
 committed by youths would increase.
Hence
, I do believe that government should introduce institutions and organisations to educate
parents
 about parenting skills. On the other side, schools can arrange
parents teacher
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meeting
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 if they noticed any violence in
school
. To elaborate,
school
 authorities can inform
parents
 if they noticed any violation in
school
. To
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exemplify
examplify
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,
school
 authorities informed my nephew's
parents
because
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that
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 he hit
the
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a
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 small bird in the
school
 by noticing
such
a
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violent behaviour in
school
 informed his
parents
.
Thus
, introducing
parents teacher
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parents-teacher
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meeting
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meetings
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 and informing
parents
 might help in reducing
crime
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the crime
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 rate which is done by youth. By summing up my opinion, establishing organisations and institutions would be advantageous to minimise the rate of
crime
.
However
,
school
 and colleges
plays
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 a Vital role
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