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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in devolped countries. What problems does this the cause? What can be done to deal with this situation?

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Today, many positions
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 as medics and school tutors are moving away to
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 in other
countries
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 because they can not earn enough money due to the economic country position. In
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 problem and the solutions that could be adopted. Foremost, the increment of brain-drain from developing to developed
countries
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 is becoming a serious problem, because there
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 not enough
people
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 who can
work
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,
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 a decrement of life quality.
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 teachers allow students to learn subjects and education, is necessary for
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 to be in contact with tutors in order to achieve literacy, and develop skills to
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 good citizens.
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 positions
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 as medic have a great impact
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healthiness
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 of the locals. If the number of doctors is not enough to cover the shift,
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, many children can not receive medicines and cures on time.
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 may
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dengerous
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dangerous
 situations for the developing
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.
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, governments could help by investments to
encorage
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encourage
 employees to stay. Throw helps,
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 as investment in human resources or facilities,
government
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 can create another kind of
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's environment where the
people
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 are evaluated for
theire
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their
 impact of
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their
 job have in the society. Investments in
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 fields could make
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 difference in order to encourage
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 to
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 even if their salaries are not reaching those of the developed
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. In conclusion,
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work
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workplace
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place
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 in Western
countries
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such
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 as schools and hospitals need more and more
people
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. To prevent the
lackness
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blackness
 of
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 in significant fields governments should encourage employees by economic helps to do not leave the country.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Brain drain
  • Skilled professionals
  • Healthcare systems
  • Education systems
  • Economic growth
  • Dependency on foreign aid
  • Social inequality
  • Quality healthcare
  • Quality education
  • Retain talent
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable growth
  • Scholarships
  • Professional development
  • Remote work capabilities
  • Local research funding
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