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Many parents send their children abroad to study.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages about the phenomenon

. It is certainly true that many
parents
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 send their
children
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 abroad to
study
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.
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, not all the effects of
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 innovation have been positive,
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 there are certainly some advantages. There are several drawbacks of
parents
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 sending their
children
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 abroad to
study
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 . A common criticism of studying
children
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 abroad is that homesickness. Living in a different country would be more difficult to survive because the feeling of emotional distress when you are away from
home
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 and in a new and unfamiliar environment would affect your health. Living away from
home
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 and our loved ones is a contributing factor affecting an individuals physical as well as mental health.
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 is because most
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parents
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 avoid sending their
children
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 to
study
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 abroad. The other negative aspect can be that one has to do all of their work on their own. Usually, when a person goes abroad to
study
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 and he has not done any of his /her personal work on his own at
home
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, it will be more tiring for him
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her to do all their work which can lead to fatigue. In spite of these negative effects,
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, sending
children
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 to
study
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 abroad has brought important benefits as well. One
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 advantage is
adopting
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a new culture. Whenever a person goes abroad for
study
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 he
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she will have an advantage of seeking new things by interacting with a new culture of new people and it will lead to a positive change in his
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her personal life. Another positive effect is students become self-confident and independent. When living in a
home
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 country
children
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 never worry about the amenities given by their
parents
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;
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, abroad students often face financial problems which give them the courage to be independent and
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 confident about themselves that they are earning money and perusing their career on their own without getting help from their
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. To sum up, while there are some obvious drawbacks to
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 sending their
children
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 to
study
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 abroad , it has
also
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 brought us many benefits at the same time.

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