Some people say music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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music
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is a great way to connect
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of different cultures and ages together, Personally I agree with
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point because
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is the language of love, and love can connect and bring
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together.
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and melody are both interconnected, lyrics might have some meanings but melody and
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don't, for,instance one video on youtube, named "Baby Shark" got 2 billion views from all over the
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, my nephew who doesn't speak or understands English, but whenever
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am with him he requests me to play that specific video every time he meets me,
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way he gets connected with children from all over the
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, who're in love with its tone and
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.
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, adults from different cultures and ages
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get connected through
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, whenever an Indian or Pakistani singer is invited to an international concert, thousands of Pakistani and Indian's get together for that concert, to enjoy
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, where they enjoy
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and make new friends.
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used by politicians to highlight their political campaign, and their political moto,
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whenever there are elections in Pakistan or India, different political parties hire some famous singers just to attract
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's attention and to gain some votes,
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,
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should not be used for negative purposes. In conclusion,
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is being used all over the
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to connect different communities all over the
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, and in the apply
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newly invented instruments will
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be used to bring
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together.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural diversity
  • harmony
  • integration
  • bridging gaps
  • foster
  • ignite
  • embrace
  • communicate
  • celebrate
  • appreciate
  • inclusivity
  • universal language
  • emotional resonance
  • shared experiences
  • intercultural dialogue
  • intergenerational connections
  • cultural exchange
  • catalyst
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