Some systems require students to specialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of these two education systems and which is better?

Nowadays, there are many educational systems for specializing in a limited range of subjects since the
students
became 15 years old.
However
, the fundamental
education
,
students
need to study in
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wide range of
curriculum
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curricula
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before they finished the basic educational platform. But, there
are
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various
education
pathway
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pathways
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for adolescent or
school aged
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school-aged
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group
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groups
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to select their own option. Government in both developed
or
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and
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developing countries have driven the national policy to improve citizen quality of
lives
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life
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and
education
or
man power
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capacity are one of the good
strategy
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to focus in each country. The fundamental studies mostly started from grade 1st to grade 12th or from primary to secondary school.
Moreover
, there were many curricula for
students
to student and develop their learning and cognitive
skill
. There are many advantages of
specific
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and general
education
system for
students
or parents ‘
decision
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. The fundamental
education
systems could support their daily life
skill
and identify what the
students
desire in the
future
. It suggested
to organize
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the draft of
future
career
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and
emphasize
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the
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individual interest. The specific
education
systems after grade 9th ,
it
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could lead the pathway of
interesting
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career. The
students
could focus
in
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each
subjects
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subject
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or
activities
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activity
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that
they
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which they
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were interested
and
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in and
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practice the individual
skill
. For
examples
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, the
students
are excellent at
mathemetics
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mathematics
in near
future
, they will have more
skill
in statistics or accounting.
Besides
, the
students
who are interested in English or any foreign languages,
they
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might
became
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the journal lists or
the
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writers in the
future
. Since there are
many
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consensus
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consensuses
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about teaching
scheme
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and development studies. I strongly agree that
specific
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education
system is very important for individual persons to choose and if they focus
in
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the thing that they admire , they could receive or obtain the main idea and
became
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the specialist of their works in one day.
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