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All high school students should be encouraged to take part in community service programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People have different views about whether or not
students
 should participate in unpaid work in their local communities.
Although
 some people are worried about
students
' engagement in
community
 services because they think that
students
 may not be focusing on the educational areas, I completely agree that
community
service
 programs for teenagers are a good idea.
First
 of all, engaging in
community
service
 provides
students
 with the opportunity to become active and has a positive impact on society.
Secondly
, volunteerism enables
students
 to acquire life
skills
 and knowledge, as well as provide a
service
 to those who need it the most.
For example
, doing activities
such
 as cleaning parks or roadsides, assisting as a teacher in local schools, and helping the elderly in the nursing homes will teach the youths to have a good mindset and make efforts in order to provide a good
service
 in their
community
.
Moreover
, participating in volunteer work helps to enhance student resumes by allowing
students
 to obtained work-related
skills
 prior to graduation, builds good references for employers in regards to
community
 involvement. It
also
 helps
students
 develop social responsibility
skills
 and become more aware of what the
community
 needs. So, these experiences could lead young people to get a high-paid job for life. By volunteering, not only
students
 get different essential
skills
 but
also
 the operations can run without costing too much.
Finally
, it is the
community
that is
 mostly affected by volunteering services. For the reasons I mentioned above, I believe that teenagers should be encouraged to serve in their local communities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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