All education (primary, secondary and further education) should be free to all people and paid and managed by the government. Do you agree or disagree with this statement
It is often claimed that authority should be paid and
handled
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handle
free of cost
schooling services for all Add a hyphen
free-of-cost
kind
of society. I confidently support Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
with
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apply
this
viewpoint. My preference is explained further
.
The fundamental argument I shall put forth is that many families can't afford educational expenditures. In India
people still do not aware Add a comma
India,
with
the importance of learning in their lives Change preposition
of
this
is due to
low standard of living unemployment and poor work life
balance.they can't send children Add a hyphen
work-life
into
Change preposition
to
institution
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institutions
this
it is Correct pronoun usage
apply
priority
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a priority
the priority
of
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for
administration
to give them Correct article usage
the administration
education
at no extra cost.
To add to the mentioned point for the progress of a nation and higher level of economy. Correct article usage
an education
In other
words
many countries around the world Add a comma
words,
provided
primary secondary Wrong verb form
provide
as well
as
university education without any charges and Correct word choice
and
this
is applied after the birth of child
. Add an article
a child
the child
This
is
not only Unnecessary verb
apply
lead
particular Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
nation
development but Change noun form
nation's
also
for
the built economy.
Change preposition
to
However
it should not be overlooked that individual Add a comma
However,
uses
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use
money
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the money
of
government Change preposition
from
schoolership
in their personal investment. If the central power will be granted funds to the public Correct your spelling
scholarship
than
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then
this
money would be spend
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be spent
in
various other things by people Change preposition
on
instead
of academic
Add an article
the academic
an academic
department
.
To close the discussion it can be eventually stated that Fix the agreement mistake
departments
state
should provide educational facilities free for Correct article usage
the state
population
Correct article usage
the population
this
can benefits
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benefit
for
poor Change preposition
apply
family
Fix the agreement mistake
families
as well as
country's
progression. I believe that every nation's government Correct article usage
the country's
hand
over free teaching for certain Fix the agreement mistake
hands
age
of students or until primary level.Fix the agreement mistake
ages
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
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- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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