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home schooling belongs to the past and is unacceptable in modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#home #society
In
this
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 part of modern schooling to
privide
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provide
 better
education
 to students; I personally believe that adopting the traditional form of teaching from
past
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 is not
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a wise
wise
 idea.In
this
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will
 discuss my viewpoint with suitable illustrations in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, there are ample
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reasons why people tend to study at home in ancient times.
First
 and foremost ,at that time,most
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countries
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the countries
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 were not developed and there
were
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 fewer
number of
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schools and colleges available only in big cities. Since
majority
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the majority
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 of people were doing labour work so they were not interested in getting
education
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. And fewer of them who were interested had
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not
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 other option except
home schooling
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homeschooling
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.
Thus
,
this
 trend started because of
lack
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the lack
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 of educational facilities.
In contrast
, in
this
 fierce-competition era,
education
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indispensable
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an indispensable
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 part of human life.without it a person cannot survive in
this
high- tech
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 world. In the development of any
nation
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education
 plays
vital
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a vital
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 role.
Therefore
, in
this
 modern world.countless schools,colleges and universities are established in each corner of
country
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the country
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.
Moreover
, all these institutions are
well- equipped
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 with
the
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modern technology gadgets like computers, printers, lab materials and so on. By learning at schools not only student's educational level but
also
 other abilities
such
 as cooperation, discipline, management, leadership are
also
impproved
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improved
.
For instance
- It is revealed by the survey conducted by 'The Tribune' magazine that due to modern
education
 system, there is substantial surge is observed in the growth of developing countries as compared to past. In conclusion,I
am completely agree
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 with
given
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 notion because it is impossible for governments to provide quality
education
 with
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 facilities to each learner at home.
In contrast
,
modern
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education
 system provides thousand number of students
accessibility
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 to these resources at
same
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the same
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 time,
that
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 leads individuals lives towards an impressive growth trajectory.
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