ocial media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

When it comes to the effects of social
media
on modern friendship,
people
tend to hold different views. Some claim that we are getting more and more disconnected with the rise of social
media
while others argue that social
media
is helping
people
to find new
friends
. On the one hand, social
media
provides us with new access to make
friends
. With the growing number of
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apps, it becomes much easier for
people
to find someone who shares the same interest
,
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since social
media
has the ability to orientate
your
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interests. Take
myself
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for
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an example, I am very interested in history and thanks to social
media
, I found a lot
people
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with
common
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interest
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. Chatting with them, I am able to exchange my view on certain topics with them and in
this
way, I made a lot of
friends
.
In addition
, social
media
helps introverted
people
to connect with others. For introverted
people
, social interaction is terrifying and they fear being rejected by others. But thanks to social
media
, they do not need to go out and suffer under the feeling of being rejected.
On the other hand
, many argue that
although
it seems easy to make
friends
through social
media
, maintaining your friendships has become more and more difficult and time-consuming because we have only a fixed amount of social capital.
Although
with social
media
, we can easily befriend more than hundreds of
people
with similar interests.
However
, the main problem is that we lack deeper connections to them because we hardly invest any face-to-face time in these relationships.
For example
, I find it hard to keep in touch with all my online
friends
and sometimes, we just exchange several words before never hearing from each other again. To conclude, I think that social
media
has made befriending other
people
easier and through social
media
, we can find a lot of
people
with similar interests which is harder in real life.
However
, we should
also
be aware that social
media
also
affects friendship in an unhealthy way. Since it has become
more and more easier
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to make new
friends
, nobody values their old friendships anymore.
Although
social
media
can help
people
find their old
friends
again,
but
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it is
the
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emotional connection that cannot be found again.
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