You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:

#room #college #student #arrangement #study #work #accommodation #officer

Dear Sir or Madam, I am

writting

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writing

this

letter to inform you that my room number is 13 and I am facing some

issue

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with my roommate. He

wake

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up late at night and

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plays

played

music

very

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high volume. So I am not able to do my

study

during so much distraction and

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he drinks and speak very

laoudly

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loudly

. I am so much disturbed

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my roommate because of his bad habits. He played music at night time with very high volume so I am not able to do my

study

and learn anything.

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he annoying

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me without any reason. With all

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things I am not able to contrate on my

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or other works. I belong to

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poor family so my parents

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not so much money for my

study

. My exams are very important for me to clear. So it's my humble request to you please change my room with other students, so I can more

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concentrate

on my

study

. And feel my parents proud. Looking forward to hearing you soon.

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Faithfully, Matthew Hayden

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

183 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter:

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

TASK 1 the process below shows how drinking water is made using solar power.

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