Nowadays more people have consumer goods like refrigerator and washing machines. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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my future career have made me quite motivated,
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strong-willed industrious person and I
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positive that Canada and Humber College is a perfect fit for me. In
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I should say that in Russia the importance of business management is growing and becoming more valuable and demanded. Expert claim that
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the professions sales representatives, data analysts, client services managers, marketing and
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managers expected to be in great demand in the coming years.
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plenty of perspectives, so I will be able to apply the knowledge and skills I will
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asset to the university and look
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the gained experience in real work back here.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • consumer goods
  • efficiency
  • health and hygiene
  • foodborne illnesses
  • environmental concerns
  • sustainability
  • economic growth
  • consumerism
  • cultural practices
  • communal
  • dependence on technology
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