Nowadays more people have consumer goods like refrigerator and washing machines. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

Clear goals

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my future career have made me quite motivated,

ambicious

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ambitious

and hardworking. I am always energetic and eager to become a competent manager and I feel ready for the hard work I am going to face. I am

decisive

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a decisive

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strong-willed industrious person and I

absolutely

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am absolutely

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positive that Canada and Humber College is a perfect fit for me. In

conclusion

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I should say that in Russia the importance of business management is growing and becoming more valuable and demanded. Expert claim that

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trend will

ne

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be

insisting

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,

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the professions sales representatives, data analysts, client services managers, marketing and

busienss

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business

managers expected to be in great demand in the coming years.

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is due to the growing number of small and large enterprises which are

loooking

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looking

for perspective and young specialists. The

enterpreneurial

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entrepreneurial

industry in Russia has

a

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plenty of perspectives, so I will be able to apply the knowledge and skills I will

recieve

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receive

back here in my country. I will do my best to become

worthy

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asset to the university and look

foward

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forward

to

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the gained experience in real work back here.