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Some people think that to reduce traffic and pollution, the government should increase the tax on petrol (gasoline). Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this.

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It is generally believed that for controlling air and noise pollution as well as traffic jams higher authorities should escalate the tax on gasoline. There are both pros and cons of increasing the price of fuel. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both of them. There are a variety of advantages of increasing tax on petrol.
Firstly
, the number of vehicles will be controlled because the majority of people will unable to afford the high prices of fuel.
Therefore
, they will prefer to use public transport
instead
 of personal vehicles.
For instance
, in China and Japan large number of individuals are using either public travel or bicycles in which there is no use of any kind of material to run.
As a result
, they remain healthy and the problem of traffic jams on roads is
also
 not present.
Secondly
, if the price of gas is increased and the number of cars diminishes it will
also
 have an environmental friendly effect
that is
 there will be less combustion of fuel and production of carbon monoxide.
Consequently
, air pollution will be under control.
Similarly
, cars and big transit
also
 make a lot of noise leading to noise pollution which will get controlled by increasing tax on petrol.
On the other hand
, there are several drawbacks as well.
To begin
 with, many people who will have to travel by public transportation has to wait long for their turn to come.
For example
, many students who cannot afford personal cars are often late to their school or college and miss their coursework After having discussed the pertinent points related to the subject, it can be inferred that
although
 there are many advantages of escalating taxes on gas, there are some disadvantages as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • excise tax
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable transportation
  • public transit
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • commuter benefits
  • fuel efficiency
  • environmental levy
  • traffic congestion
  • renewable energy sources
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