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As global trade increases, many goods, even those we use in a daily basis, are produced in other countries and have to be transported in long distances. Do you think the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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With the development of international
business
 ,communities around the world try to purchase things from foreign countries . Unfortunately ,
this
 process has come to a point ,where
people
 try to buy branded
items
 even for there
day
 to
day
 life .
However
 ,
this
 new trend definitely affects the local producers and at the same time , the cost of living for local
people
 will invariably be high . Due to these facts , I believe the drawbacks of
this
 phenomenon is much higher than its benefits .
To begin
 with , as we can see , international companies has different approaches to reach local markets.
As a result
 of their creative marketing campaign and global name , most local
people
 will trend to buy these products . Unfortunately ,
this
 will affect the local producers and they will get discouraged for the
business
 . To illustrate
this
 , as per a research report published by a pioneer Indian economic magazine , about 35% of local
business
 persons closed their factories during the
last
 5 years due to the recent popularity of global bands in India. At the same time , When we purchase more and more international products , our foreign reserve will be a trend to decline, leading the country to a shortage of Dollars.
Furthermore
 , as we have to pay more for these global branded
items
 it will invariably lead to an increase in the cost of living.
For instance
 , according to recent research published by a Sri Lankan university ,
this
 year there is about a 25% increase in the cost of living of Sri Lankans compared to
last
 year mainly due to purchasing branded
items
 for
day
 to
day
 life . In conclusion , With the development of the global market
people
 tend to buy branded
items
 even for their daily living . Since
this
 could lead to the closing of the local
business
 and reduce the foreign reserve of the country ,
this
 writer believes that the negative effects of
this
 will be far more than its positive effects .
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