In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between citles. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, utilisation of
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transport has rapidly increased. The debated view focuses on
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pondering that spending
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amount of money on new railway tracks should be boomed. I believe that
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view has
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side. Both the aspects along with my point of view are explained in the following paragraphs. On one hand, there are several reasons behind improving railway lines between mega Cities.
First
and foremost, if
government
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spends on making railway tracks it will be very beneficial for numerous civilians because job handed
people
use
transportation
services
on daily basis. So, time will reduce and get more leisure time to spare on effective activities.
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, humankind
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lots of new facilities and obtain better
services
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comparatively
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example, in the past there were not enough trains between Mumbai and Delhi but
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present
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number of trains which are available
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various timings. Eventually, layman finds it very useful and
also
effective steps taken by authorities are helpful
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some extent.
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a coin.
Firstly
, there are ample
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services
which are not
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up to
the mark at many places in India.
Therefore
,
people
are suffering from various
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of
transportation
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.
For instance
, in the rural area bus
services
as well as train
services
are not available so
government
should look upon
this
serious matters.
Secondly
, rural
people
can't afford cars and personal vehicles.
Hence
, they are always preferring public transport in order to improve the infrastructure and decrease the price of tickets.
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, spend more and more remuneration on current
transportation
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is very critical at some places.So, currently improve those and
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one. In my opinion,
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should spend enough money on current public
transportation
because it is
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recommended
services
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which everyone
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in their daily life.Even sometimes it
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challenging to find
transportation
services
in difficult times. To conclude,
this
essay has been explored from both
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sides with enough evidence which
finally
allows me to pen down and state that
government
should hire private companies for and provide enough Budget to improve means of transport for residents
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for commuters.
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