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Today more people are travelling than ever before. why is this the case ? what are the benefits of traveling for the traveller .

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In recent years, many publics have been decided to go to travel a lot than the past. There is no question that increasing the number of tourists is related to the development of transport and globalisation.
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tourism
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 has become popular and what are the advantages of travelling for
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tourists. It is evident that the field of
tourism
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have
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 been developed along with the globalised world. After 1900, with transport and communication have thrived rapidly, the globalisation lead to many changes: the time that
have
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 to spend on the road have
became
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 shorten, the border line's meaning has
been deteriorated
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 and the efficiency of work has been increased.
Since
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 of its variations, individuals can get more
lesiure
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leisure
 time and money that they can spend more for their
lives'
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 value.
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, people have started to find the things, which
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can improve lives quality. For these reasons, as
the
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time goes by, individuals invest
on
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tourism
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remarkably
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 than before. As travelling has
became
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 famous to the public, many scholars pronounced about benefits of travelling.
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, travellers can get a lot of
knowledges
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knowledge
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 while they are travelling, seeing meaningful artworks and monuments around the world.
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, They can
expanded
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 their horizons by
interacitng
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interacting
many
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 people who have various nations and cultures.
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, They can escape boring
everyday
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 by facing exotic
view
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views
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,
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 tourists can get
an
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energy for living. In conclusion, globalization is the cause of
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expanding travel nowadays. Plus, growing the fields of
tourism
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 gives many benefits to
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the traveller
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traveller
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such
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 as broader knowledge, wider views, and life energy via going to
unfamiliar
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an unfamiliar
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place
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places
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