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The Plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The plans show the layout of a school’s
sport
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 centre now, and after
rebuild
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,
how
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what
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 it will look like. Overall, now, the university’s
sport
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sports
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center
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have
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 2 outdoor courts, changing room, gym, seating 25m
pool
 and reception.
On the other hand
, the future plans going to expand the size of the
sport
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center
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 and develop more facilities.
Firstly
, today, go
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through
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though
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through
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 the university’s
sport
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center’s
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centre’s
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 reception which is in the middle of the
center
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, there has a 25m
pool
, and changing room is at the west of
this
pool
, on the north of
this
pool
 is
gym
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a gym
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, at the east of
pool
 is
seating
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a seating
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area
.
In addition
, there
has
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 2 2 outdoor courts
at
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the
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both sides of the middle
center
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centre
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.
Secondly
, regarding
to
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the future plan,
reception
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the reception
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area
at
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is at
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 the same place but expand the size into a big lobby. It will redevelop
sports
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the sports
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 shop and the cafe. There will have 2 little changing rooms at the corner of the southwest and southeast of the lobby. 25m
pool
, changing room,
seating
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area
 will keep the location,
by contrast
, gym
area
 will extend more place.
Furthermore
, 2 outdoor courts will
demolition
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, the sports hall, 2 dance studios will
be build
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 at the west of the
center
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centre
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.
In addition
, at the east of the middle centre,
leisure
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a leisure
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pool
 will
planning
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plan
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 to construct.
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