Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree

To what point should
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government
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support
athletes?
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diverge on the answer to
this
question. Some people feel that
government
should
support
areas
that
is
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directly related to
welfare
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the welfare
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of
general
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public. I believe that, while
government
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the government
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is responsible for supporting individuals in sports,
but
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there are many other priorities that
deserves
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governmets
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governments
government
attention.
Firstly
, there are enough wealthy patrons around to
support
athlets
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athletes
. Many
companies
support
athletes as they can link their names to successful
playes
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players
plays
.
For
instance
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Coca Cola and Pepsi take
advantages
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advantage
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of famous
footbalist
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football
footballs
like Messy. These
companies
can
also
provide
equiements
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equipment
requirements
for teams or players to
support
them.
This
is
also
beneficial for
companies
while people think positively of
companies
that
support
sport
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teams or individuals.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
, There are many other
crusial
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crucial
areas
that
government
should take care
about
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. The most pressing priority is healthcare. Governments must provide
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lifetime
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life time
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health insurance for citizens.
Other
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areas
that should shift
govermental
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governmental
focus toward is free education for
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children
childrens
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children
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. Other grounds like public
transportaion
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transportation
and keeping cities clean are
also
are in priority in comparison with supporting athletes. To conclude, I believe that on
one
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hand
government
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the government
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should provide some level of
support
for their national players in international
sport
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events. On the other medical insurance and public education are
notheworthy
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noteworthy
areas
that
deserves
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deserve
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a
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severe attention.
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