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Many people believe that educational standards have declined in recent times, particularly in the areas of literacy and numeracy. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer possible solutions to it.

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 “spring offensive” of wage demands being anything other than a crushing disappointment. Companies in Japan have resisted raising prices by any means possible for the past three decades, helping to establish a mindset where inflationary expectations withered to nothing, and companies felt no shame in offering the nation’s workforce one of the lowest average wage increases in the OECD. Despite a shrinking labour force and a job market so tight that companies struggle to recruit everyone from waiters to software engineers, trade unions have gone along with it. Suddenly, two years into a pandemic and with the prices of the nation’s favourite snacks rising for the
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • Numeracy
  • Literacy
  • Standardized testing
  • Economic disparities
  • Inequality
  • Underprivileged communities
  • Immediate gratification
  • Foundational subjects
  • Professional development
  • Holistic approach
  • Comprehensive reforms
  • Socio-economic background
  • Engaged
  • Traditional methods
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