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Once children start school,teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Who influences more to
children
,parents,
teachers
 or friends is the most debated statement after they start going to school over all the forums on social media sites.some people are of opinion that
teachers
 have a major share in shaping their intellectual and social development and I agree on a bigger part of it as it works in real
life
 for the majority of
students
 after getting into school. After starting school
students
 obey,appreciate and follow their mentors in each and every field and subject and try to be one of them.On the number of ,instances
teachers
 become their ideal to follow and
students
 try to be like them, follow their idealogy throughout their
life
.On the other hands
teachers
also
 try to provide examples for
students
 by matching their words and deads of
life
 by following rules and regulations as well as being honest ,trustworthy, hard-working and intelligent,keep updating for their knowledge horizons.
Although
 parents and peers influence
children
's
life
 their share remains on lower site than that of
teachers
.Parents at home have to shape
children
's social and spiritual backgrounds because they obey them in that aspects.Friends for the majority of instances guide
children
 in personal habits and involvement in sports and other curricular activities because they go with the company of peers for
such
 activities. To conclude in
children
's all directional development everyone contributes by providing support,guide and company but
teachers
 outweigh among all by constantly remodelling and redirecting the
children
 for their better and successful career ahead and making them better citizens and workers for the country.
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