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Some people say that it is better for children to grow up in a city. Other say it is better for them to grow up in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People always question which
place
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 is good for a
child
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 to be raised, a
city
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 or the
countryside
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. Some agree that a
city
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 is better while others think it is the
countryside
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. I think
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children
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 should grow up in a safe
place
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 with love but to do well in life later
education
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 is very important.
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education
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options
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 for
children
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 growing up in the
city
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 and
countryside
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 in the following paragraphs.
Education
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 is very important for
children
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 and it is no secret that a big
city
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 is a
place
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 that has more
options
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 for
education
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 or jobs. The
children
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 in the
city
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 have many more opportunities to choose to study in public, private schools or special schools. In India, if a
child
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 is in a big
city
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 like Delhi they have more
options
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 for school, to do sport or learn music.
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, there are many international schools.
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 is a reason for some people to think the
city
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 is good for
children
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 to grow up. The
countryside
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 can teach
children
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 about simple life and there are
education
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options
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. Small community living will have fewer
options
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 for a
child
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 but if a
child
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 is smart, he can study anywhere or become a success in life even if from a village because more than a
place
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 it is the
child
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 who can do it. Vijay Kumar is famous for shooting; he is from a very small village in Himachal Pradesh in India and won five gold medals for shooting in Olympics. In total, all
children
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 need a chance to grow up with good
education
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 and some people like cities and some like
countryside
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. In my opinion, both
options
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is
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 great for a
child
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 to grow up if they follow their dream.

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