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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
 argue about violence from television and computer games would affect
the
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society in different ways while
others
 have the opposite idea that
these factor
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 can not have any significant effects on the behaviour of participants. The violent content
which
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in every social media does affect
people
 to an extreme level as it can
motivates
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people
 to hurt
others
, that being said, it does not
the
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originally have any intentions to hurt
others
, it motivates
others
. Though, the issuers must take measures about anything they put on television,
such
 that they do not include extreme violence. Individuals do not have any plan on hurting
others
, but after watching some violent situations,
then
, they might trigger them into
a
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thought to hurt other
people
.
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, a
real life
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 murder case involves two boys at very young ages, about 10 years old, a boy who was affected by a survival shooter game named "Free Fire", murdered his friend because he thought his friend can respawn like the characters in these game.
On the other hand
, currently,
such
 violent video games are being played by millions of
people
 around the world and most of them do not have thoughts or inflicted of
harming
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 onto
others
. Due to the fact that they do not affect the society in a negative manner, just some of them but the harm
done
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 by these individuals is really extreme.
However
, if
people
are realise
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 the downsides of
such
 violent actions, they might raise awareness and learn from them to take their own protective solutions and be careful In conclusion, the
violence
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 scenery in the media does not so dangerous as
people
belived
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believed
believe
, rather , it affects the ones who are not normal, and it can
gives
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 those kinds of
people
 more ideas that they might
caused
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.
Therefore
, in my opinion, they are not
so
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 bad as most
of
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people
 thought, they do not significantly affect the society
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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