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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your opinion.

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A number of humans want to try modern
things
such
 as
traveling
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 around the world, tasting different types of food but other people prefer to do the same
things
 which they are familiar do it. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides and I will support humans who try to do new
activities
 As all human beings are different, everyone's choice of
activities
 and hobbies vary as well, it is very useful for them to do new
things
 because it helps
to
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them to change their minds and their worldview.
For example
, people who visited a lot of countries can learn
their
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 cultures, can taste national foods and know
traditions
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their traditions
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. And they can visit a lot of interesting places
such
 as historical places, attraction parks, museums and can buy something for
memory
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the memory
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 of
this
 place.
However
, some people are not the same as I mentioned before, so there are human beings who can not accept the change easily.
This
 kind likes to keep hobbies and
activities
 in which they are more familiar. To my way of thinking the main reason behind
this
, is they can not risk trying new
things
, whether
that is
 a place or
a food
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food
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. They do not want to have excitement and adventure. To sum up, everyone has their own choices. Few like to be in the familiar atmosphere of food, places,
activities
 while some just like something new. Trying new
activities
 are
good
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 way to develop their mind and change their worldview. As far as I like a person who tries something different.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Novelty
  • Routine
  • Comfort zone
  • Risk-taker
  • Risk-averse
  • Enrichment
  • Personal growth
  • Innovation
  • Creativity
  • Stability
  • Tradition
  • Habit
  • Familiarity
  • Personal enrichment
  • Life stages
  • Fulfilling
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