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the alteration to the Eastminster park between 1999 and 2009.

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The given maps illustrate the alteration to the Eastminster
park
 between 1999 and 2009. Overall, the general overview here is that there was a noticeable transformation after the construction take place and the significant change can be seen in the addition of extra facilities. According to the map,it can be seen that in 1999, there was a river running from the east to the west, situated on the northeast was an enormous woodland,near the large
house
 with gardens.There were the houses to the north,while stood on the northeast was a
park
. To the south, there were a hospital and a shop to the west beside the river with a school between them. A street of the
house
 was located on the east which
next
 to it was a public garden.
Moreover
, there was a Railway station located on the bottom. By 2009, the
park
 has undergone significant changes,with the woodland being replaced by an adventure
park
.
Similarly
,there was a hotel with a golf course where the large
house
 stood.the
park
 was smaller the make room for the extent of the houses. To the south,the hospital remained unaffected but its size was bigger,while where the school stood the shopping complex was located.The street of the
house
 was replaced by the apartment blocks and the public garden was gone to make way for the new houses.there was an addition of Factories a Waterhouse to the south.
However
, the shop and the railway station remained unchanged.
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