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Some people think that renewable energy sources like solar and wind power should replace fossil fuels such as coal and gas as soon as possible. Others think we should continue to use fossil fuels while it is still cheap to do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The world has been using fossil fuels as a source of
energy
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 for a long time,
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, there is a possibility that
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 resource will be gone in the future if
people
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 keep consuming it.
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, some
people
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 believe that replacing it with renewable
energy
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 including sunlight and wind
power
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 immediately will solve the crisis of fossil fuels, while others think that using coal and gas from fossil as
power
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 is cheaper than any renewable
energy
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 and folk should keep using the previous method. The most important reason why society should start using renewable
energy
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 is that one day all the gas and coal will be disappeared and if that day arrives, there will be no source of
power
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 for anyone,
people
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 will not be able to use the internet, drive a car or even turn on the light since there will be no electricity.
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, the
power
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 that can be reused again and again
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 as solar from sunlight and
power
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 from wind should be consumed
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.
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, there is
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 a negative effect of renewable resources, and it is the price. Not only
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costs
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such
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 a huge amount of money to produce them, the price of devices and vehicles that can be used with these energies are
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 high,
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example
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 EV (electronic vehicle) car,
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 costs much more than a normal car that consumes gas.
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, if the government finds that the
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 crisis is critical and starts helping by reducing the costs of green
energy
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 devices and cars, more
people
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 will be able to afford them. In conclusion, I believe that nations should start using renewable
power
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 to prevent the vanishment of fossil oils,
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, the government should
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 support
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 new type of
energy
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 consumption by dumping the price of all tools that can work with green
energy
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.
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