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Some people think that renewable energy sources like solar and wind power should replace fossil fuels such as coal and gas as soon as possible. Others think we should continue to use fossil fuels while it is still cheap to do so. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The world has been using fossil fuels as a source of
energy
 for a long time,
however
, there is a possibility that
this
 resource will be gone in the future if
people
 keep consuming it.
Therefore
, some
people
 believe that replacing it with renewable
energy
 including sunlight and wind
power
 immediately will solve the crisis of fossil fuels, while others think that using coal and gas from fossil as
power
 is cheaper than any renewable
energy
 and folk should keep using the previous method. The most important reason why society should start using renewable
energy
 is that one day all the gas and coal will be disappeared and if that day arrives, there will be no source of
power
 for anyone,
people
 will not be able to use the internet, drive a car or even turn on the light since there will be no electricity.
Thus
, the
power
 that can be reused again and again
such
 as solar from sunlight and
power
 from wind should be consumed
instead
.
Nonetheless
, there is
also
 a negative effect of renewable resources, and it is the price. Not only
it
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costs
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such
 a huge amount of money to produce them, the price of devices and vehicles that can be used with these energies are
also
 high,
for
example
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 EV (electronic vehicle) car,
also
 costs much more than a normal car that consumes gas.
Nevertheless
, if the government finds that the
energy
 crisis is critical and starts helping by reducing the costs of green
energy
 devices and cars, more
people
 will be able to afford them. In conclusion, I believe that nations should start using renewable
power
 to prevent the vanishment of fossil oils,
however
, the government should
also
 support
this
 new type of
energy
 consumption by dumping the price of all tools that can work with green
energy
.
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