Computers are now the basis of the modern world. They should therefore be introduced into classrooms, and their programs used for direct teaching purposes. However, dependence on computers in teaching may carry a certain degree of risk to students. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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In view of the booming technology,

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have been the fundamental tools in nowadays

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, a controversial debate on whether

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in classrooms and

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into the curriculum. Still, some people consider that teaching relays on

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risky to

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, the pros and cons will be discussed followed by a personal opinion.

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with,

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can make classes more efficient. As

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usually have lots of paperwork, finding the correct paper may be

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and slowed the teaching process.

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, putting the work and notes in

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can save the time spend on finding.

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can search the

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to find the file or airdrop from others.

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can improve the efficiency in class.

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may be a disturbance and result in

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. As some elderly teachers may not be familiar with

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rely on visual elements and be reluctant to read or learn in

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way.

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can play video games or water TV shows more easily with

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may be less

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in class and be loose in

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. In conclusion,

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into classrooms may be risky,

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can still be

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useful

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efficiency.

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, as

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computer’s programs

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vital step among lots of

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generation may be hard to survive.

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into school is important in my opinion.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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